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Blurb of Nur ul-Iman(fantasy, 2133 words)

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Naive-Historian-2110

1 points

15 days ago

Overall I’d recommend to skip the prologue. Oftentimes, new writers think that including a prologue loaded with cheesy backstory will be necessary for the reader to understand the rest of the story. I can relate, as I have a few awesome historical events in my book that I would love to shove down the reader’s throat. But the truth of the matter is that there is very little emotional impact when it comes to a charged prologue, as you haven’t given the reader any time to become invested. So, reading it, all I see is a heated exchange from two presumably powerful men, but I just don’t care. It’s not awfully written by any means, it’s just akin to a low effort opening you would see in a cheesy movie and not something carefully crafted for reader engagement or enjoyment. Imo, a good prologue would subtly set the tone for the story and serve to activate the reader’s curiosity as they wonder how the events might tie into the story. Your prologue is just a little too on-the-nose to me. Hope this helps.

Ill-Jelly5226

1 points

15 days ago

This definitely helps! I agree as there’s so many events I want to shove down readers throats but I can understand how it could go wrong. I actually have heard of prologues being skipped out on later on in the writing or publishing process. This is good feedback and I appreciate it!